Comments for Jennifer the Ghostwriter https://jennifertheghostwriter.com Let's get that book inside you . . . OUT! Thu, 11 Apr 2024 17:54:03 +0000 hourly 1 https://wordpress.org/?v=6.5.2 Comment on Create the Illusion of Reality by Showing (not telling). by kanikaas3 https://jennifertheghostwriter.com/create-the-illusion-of-reality-by-showing-not-telling/#comment-6 Thu, 26 Apr 2018 05:49:33 +0000 https://jennifertheghostwriter.com/?p=382#comment-6 Great examples. I am looking through the manuscript, noting where I can beef up the “show.”

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Comment on #1 Skill for Great Writing by kanikaas3 https://jennifertheghostwriter.com/great-writing-skill/#comment-4 Thu, 26 Apr 2018 05:26:32 +0000 https://jennifertheghostwriter.com/?p=492#comment-4 Creating pictures is definitely my challenge, as my day job was research and technical writing: nothing but the facts, graphs, conclusions and recommendations. Here is an example of how I am attempting to “show” instead of “tell.” I would welcome your feedback. Please excuse me for using this as an example if you are a vegetarian.

Early last winter, squeals pierced the crisp air as the Williams men and the cook, Peggy/Margaret, had slaughtered, cleaned, skinned, eviscerated, and butchered about two dozen, 250-pound, mud-covered, splotchy white hogs. Peggy/Margaret and two of her teenaged daughters rubbed bay salt and salt-petre into the hog parts as a preservative, then they pushed pieces of the pork fat and muscle through a meat grinder. Using well-cleaned hog intestines as casings, they hand-mixed fennel seed, parsley, sage, pepper, and salt into the ground hog meat. The meat-filled casings were twisted twice every four inches to form long sausage links. Peggy/Margaret hung the aromatic ropes in the six-foot square smokehouse, which was located next to the outdoor summer kitchen. The sausages would cure for several months. Everybody knows the sweltering Maryland summer heat makes it impossible to keep food stuffs from spoiling, so meats eaten during the spring and summer months were often preserved the prior winter.

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Comment on Cleaning Up Your Article’s “Final” Draft by Jennifer T. Grainger https://jennifertheghostwriter.com/cleaning-articles-final-draft/#comment-3 Tue, 21 Feb 2017 16:07:41 +0000 https://jennifertheghostwriter.com/?p=416#comment-3 In reply to Lynda Hadley.

HI Lynda. Thanks for the comment. When I Googled for the source of the quote I landed on Quote Investigator. There was a long list of possible originators of the quote. Quote investigator states “The first known instance in the English language was a sentence translated from a text written by the French mathematician and philosopher Blaise Pascal. The French statement appeared in a letter in a collection called “Lettres Provinciales” in the year 1657:

Je n’ai fait celle-ci plus longue que parce que je n’ai pas eu le loisir de la faire plus courte.

Here is one possible modern day translation of Pascal’s statement. Note that the term “this” refers to the letter itself.

“I have made this longer than usual because I have not had time to make it shorter.”

I used the unsubstantiated Mark Twain version because I believed more people know the name of Mark Twain than Blaise Pascal. Which shows my bent to helping people become good storytellers (as opposed to factual reporters)..My writing teacher used to say something like “sometimes you have to make things up to tell a truth.” (not in journalism, of course, only in storytelling.) Thanks again for taking the time to comment!.

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Comment on Cleaning Up Your Article’s “Final” Draft by Lynda Hadley https://jennifertheghostwriter.com/cleaning-articles-final-draft/#comment-2 Tue, 21 Feb 2017 14:24:47 +0000 https://jennifertheghostwriter.com/?p=416#comment-2 “I have made this longer than usual because I have not had time to make it shorter.” ~ This expresses the meaning with greater wit and impact, You are teaching us how to be journalists..,,:-)

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